Cover letter example critique:
Dear Russell,
For consistency, I began your cover letter using the same heading as that on your resume. This affords a professional look to your "employment" package.
I began the letter by stating your interest in bringing years of expertise in airline operations and ground security to Fly Right Avionics Enterprises. I then wrote: "In these troubled times, I know I can add to public safety and security in the transportation industry."
I went on to write of your 20 years with US Airways, then bulleted those skills that would interest a hiring manager. These included your aircraft investigation experience, your work at security checkpoints, and ground security training.
I then added another bulleted section to present your other skills, including your 30+ years in the airline industry, your expertise in dealing with government agencies (including the FAA), and your ability to reduce absenteeism and occupational injuries.
I next restated the need for heightened security in these troubled times.
I then wrote, "I will be calling you within the following week to schedule an interview so that we might discuss this matter further." In the industry, it's not only accepted, but expected that the prospective employee contact the hiring manager, rather than waiting for them to contact you. This puts you in the driver's seat. It also clearly indicates your interest in the job.
I then ended the letter with the usual parting remarks.
All decisions to include or modify data were in keeping with the guidelines and standards of the Professional Association of Resume Writers (PARW).
With this cover letter, you now have a powerful tool that's well-organized, intriguing, and aesthetically pleasing.
It was a pleasure serving you again, Russell.
Best of luck in all your future endeavors.
CyberEdit Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer
