Internship resume critique:
Hello Rick,
Given your desire to secure a summer internship, I chose a "Student" template that is streamlined, with a decidedly modern look, but also emphasizes your academic background.
I began your resume by organizing your contact information so that it would be easy to locate, but would not visually detract from your qualifications.
I chose a Profile, rather than an Objective. In an objective, you’re telling a hiring manager what you want; whereas in a profile, you’re also explaining what you can do for the targeted company. You’re making a powerful statement by placing a hiring manager’s needs above your own.
I next listed your Education, placing the information about your elective sequence in Digital and Computer Science in a bulleted format so that the information was more visually accessible to an internship recruiter who is looking for someone with this background. I also added the information about your membership in the Society of Hispanic Engineers.
I then included a "Professional Experience" section, italicizing your job titles so that this information would highlight the responsibilities you have undertaken and the leadership that you have exhibited. I also presented details about each position in bulleted lists so that this information is more visually accessible for your audience. I began each bullet point with the strongest action verb possible, while also rewriting the text for conciseness and maximum impact.
For example, you wrote:
"Duties included interfacing with customers, managing, training people, marketing, and a great deal of leadership."
I rewrote this information and organized it into multiple bullets, which read:
· Provide customer service, including responding to and resolving client concerns and complaints.
· Recruited, trained, and supervised employees.
· Marketed products to increase sales.
In another example, you wrote:
"Responsible for over all training, customers service, product quality, shipping and receiving, and day to day operation."
I rewrote this information and organized it into multiple bullets, which read:
· Oversee daily operations, including training and supervising eight employees.
· Ensure product quality; complete daily shipping and receiving paperwork.
I completed your resume by mentioning that you could supply references at your recruiter’s request.
All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with the guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association of Resume Writers (PARW).
With this resume, you now have a powerful tool that showcases your skills and leadership abilities at a glance while also being aesthetically pleasing. It was a pleasure serving you, Rick.
Good luck in all of your future endeavors.
ResumeEdge Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
