Investment professional resume critique:
Dear Thomas,
For your resume, I used a "traditional" format that's elegant and uncluttered and uses the Times New Roman font.
I centered and bolded your name, making it slightly larger than the rest of the text so that it would stand out. I also made your contact information slightly larger than your address, then placed the phone number flush left and the email flush right so that a hiring manager could easily locate this data.
Because of your recent graduate status, I organized the material in this manner:
I began with a "Summary of Qualifications" in which I stated that you were recently awarded a Master of Science in Aerospace Engineering. I then included the information about your teaching classical thermodynamics and researching the development of a low NOx combustor, as your Master's thesis mentioned that subject. I ended the paragraph by saying you have solid mathematical, finance, and computer capabilities.
For the next section, I chose your skill sets - Numerical Mathematics, Computational Finance, and Computer Science as these are quite impressive and are relevant to your aerospace engineering goal.
Next, I grouped your education and honors under a separate section. Because you were awarded both an MS and a BA from St. Louis County University (besides taking noncredit courses there), I underscored the University's name, then listed all of your academics beneath it so as to avoid the redundancy of repeating the school's name over and over. I also listed the fellowship award you received from the University in that section.
On the second page of the resume, I listed your professional experience.
I rewrote several of the bullets to make them more concise and to increase their impact. For example, you wrote:
"Developed bonds and their derivatives pricing logics for an application to the "real" market."
I rewrote this to read:
"Created pricing logics for bonds and their derivatives for application to the real market."
In another example, you wrote:
"Developed massive computer programs implementing probabilistic models for flow simulation."
I rewrote that to read:
"Designed complex computer programs that implemented probabilistic models for flow simulation."
In the last section of your resume, I listed your publications and presentations using the accepted format that bolds your name to highlight your achievement.
The only thing I deleted from your old resume was your interest in globalization, patent law, and your sports. Because resumes should only contain data relevant to your job search, the other material is best left for an interview. It's an effective way to "break the ice" with the hiring manager.
All modifications and deletions were in keeping with the standards and guidelines of the Professional Association of Resume Writers.
With this resume, you now have a powerful tool to use in your job search.
Good luck, Thomas. It was a pleasure serving you.
CyberEdit Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
